FREE SHORT STORY EBOOK!
I self-published my first ebook! I also designed the cover art myself, so don't hate on it. lol And I've made it PERMA-FREE!
Title: Lightning
Crimes
Series: Disaster
Crimes 2.5
Genre: Romantic-Suspense
Genre: Romantic-Suspense
NOTE: LIGHTNING CRIMES is a teaser story that
takes place between Seismic Crimes and Tsunami Crimes.
BLURB:
A freak lightning storm unleashes its energy on Central
Florida. Bolts of lightning crash to the ground. Torrential rain soaks
everything within seconds. And the power goes out, casting Beth and Donovan’s
apartment into darkness. Beth is already on edge after receiving a menacing
phone call several months ago, and this storm doesn’t help with her nerves.
Donovan tries to distract her from Mother Nature’s tantrum,
but someone else has other plans. When they find the front door to their
apartment wide open, they soon realize that it Isn’t an accident. Someone is
in their apartment with them.
What crime can happen as fast as lightning?
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QUESTION: What writing rule do you wish you’d never
heard?
I wish I never heard that passive voice is wrong. Although active voice is better, and I do
eliminate as much passive voice as possible in my work and the work I edit, I
(for one) don’t think it’s entirely wrong.
Another rule I struggled with (only because I stressed out about eliminating it from my writing) is that comma splices are incorrect. Comma splices are super common in most books. It's apparently acceptable in some languages, but in English it's an error. Go figure. :P
These two rules gave me the biggest headaches when I first started publishing. Why? Because I had to learn to change the way I wrote. Hurricane Crimes and 30 Seconds are FULL of passive voice. I'll admit it. And comma splices can be found in my stories up until recently as well. Since then, however, my writing has grown. And I am proud of that! :D
Another rule I struggled with (only because I stressed out about eliminating it from my writing) is that comma splices are incorrect. Comma splices are super common in most books. It's apparently acceptable in some languages, but in English it's an error. Go figure. :P
These two rules gave me the biggest headaches when I first started publishing. Why? Because I had to learn to change the way I wrote. Hurricane Crimes and 30 Seconds are FULL of passive voice. I'll admit it. And comma splices can be found in my stories up until recently as well. Since then, however, my writing has grown. And I am proud of that! :D
OPTIONAL FEBRUARY 1ST QUESTION: How has being a writer changed your experience
as a reader?
Reminder: The questions
are optional and meant as a prompt if you struggle with what to post. You don't
have to answer a question if you don't want to. :)
Just downloaded your short story and looking forward to reading it. I think you did a wonderful job on the cover art. Your new author pic is great as well.
ReplyDeleteThanks for all the hard work you put into the IWSG contest :-)
Thank you!
DeleteI hope you enjoy my short story :)
Loved your cover and will in time download your story.
ReplyDeleteI hope you had a wonderful Christmas and that this year you will achieve your ambitions.
Yvonne.
Thanks, Yvonne! I did have a nice Christmas. I hope you did, too. And I hope this year is good to you.
DeleteYou did it - your book is out!
ReplyDeleteI didn't like that passive rule either. It messed with me for years.
Yay!!!
DeleteSame here.
Congratulations on getting your book out. I don't like the passive voice rule either. It bugs me no end.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Rachna!
DeleteIt bugs me, too. Still. ;)
Passive rule I have rolled my eyes at a few times, if it fits, go for it. Commas, meh, they work when they work haha
ReplyDeleteCommas are funny little things.
DeleteCongrats on the ebook!
ReplyDeleteI still struggle with comma issues. Sigh.
Thank you!
DeleteCommas are tricky.
I have to limit passive voice in my writing as well. Congrats on the ebook. I'll have to check it out.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Tamara!
DeleteThank you!
ReplyDeleteOh, yes. I hate it when I hear that backstory is bad. And I seem to hear that so much these days. I don't mind backstory.
Congratulations on being the big winner!!!!
Yay for the winners and the eBook!
ReplyDeleteLOL! You only hate the rules because they made you stretch. =) You know you're totally grateful for them in the end. (P.S. There is a time and place for passive voice, just not very often.)
I totally do! LOL! And you're right, I am grateful for them in the end, but I still don't think passive voice is bad. As you said, there is a time and place for it.
DeleteCongrats to the winners!!!
ReplyDeleteI remember kind of freaking out when I heard about the passive voice rule - but, boy did it make me stronger too! :)
I agree, it did the same for me.
DeleteCongratulations!
ReplyDeleteComma splices? I guess I still don't know that rule.
Thanks!
DeleteIt was a newer rule for me as well when I learned about it. lol
Congrats on conquering e-book publication! That cover is great - very powerful.
ReplyDeleteThe thing about the rules is that they're not always appropriate. Sometimes passive is what's required, and sometimes a sentence is so looong that it requires an extra comma, even if it's technically considered a splice. But I guess we must learn the rules so that we can confidently break them, heh.
Thank you so much!
DeleteThat is so true. Writers shouldn't be restricted by so many rules. We should break them when we have to.
Our English language is full of exceptions to everything!! Ugh. Congrats to all those winners!!
ReplyDeleteIt sure is.
DeleteI haven't mastered the comma either.
ReplyDeleteThanks for co-hosting.
Commas are tricky. I still take pause every now and then.
DeleteYikes, comma splices. Guilty! It all started years ago when I read this quote by Kurt Vonnegut (I just looked it up):
ReplyDelete“Here is a lesson in creative writing. First rule: Do not use semicolons. They are transvestite hermaphrodites representing absolutely nothing."
If we can't use commas, and we can't use semicolons, how the heck are we supposed to punctuate? Periods are not always appropriate... sigh.
Congratulations on Lightning Crimes!
VR Barkowski
I use whatever punctuation mark I want. I even use semi colons. ;)
DeleteThank you!!!
I haven't completely mastered comma usage. Sometimes I overuse them and other times I underuse them. This is why we have copyeditors.
ReplyDeleteCommas are so easy to misuse.
DeletePassive voice has some very useful functions, so I never think about that rule. Good for you.
ReplyDeleteIt can be very useful. Thanks! ;)
DeleteWow, you did an amazing job on that cover! I'm so impressed. Congrats and I hope you get lots of downloads for this story.
ReplyDeleteAlso congrats to the IWSG winners!
Thank you so much!!! :D I had fun making it.
DeleteAs with most rules, there are few absolutes. Sometimes, the best choice is using passive voice. Occasionally, fragments are better than complete sentences. I guess the best course is knowing the rules before you try and bend them...or something.
ReplyDeleteWell put, Ryan. I agree that most rules aren't absolutes. There are times when they should be paid attention to and times when they should be ignored. :)
DeleteOh, cool! I had no idea you did the cover art, too. Great job!
ReplyDeleteI have a feeling you already know what I think about passive wording. :) It's never WRONG to use it; I just think active phrasing is more engaging and makes for stronger writing. (And yes... I DID use a semi-colon.)
I sure did. :) Thanks!
DeleteIt is more engaging, certainly. And I still use semi-colons. ;)
Sounds like a great book! The cover art looks great! :)
ReplyDeleteI am so glad to know that I am not the only one who hates the passive voice rule. I struggle so much with it. And you are totally right with comma splices too. These are some of the trickiest rules in writing because, like you said, you have to learn to write differently. Oh the struggle… Perhaps through practice writing in active voice without comma splices becomes easier? Or at least that's my hope anyway.
Thank you so much!
DeleteIt does become easier. I've can catch comma splices now before I write them. As for writing in active voice, I don't always do this. I fix as much as I can, but I don't stress anymore if I have passive voice in my writing. I think it's normal and just fine to have passive voice. :)
Congratulations on your release, and to the winners!
ReplyDeleteI don't know why Word thinks passive voice is always wrong. I had to turn off my grammar check, when I still used Word, because it kept underlining passive voice. Sometimes it's more effective, or works better with a particular scene or passage.
It's hard to read as just a reader anymore, particularly when revisiting books I loved when I was younger. I'm constantly thinking about how there could've been more character development, less superfluous adverbs, more action, or a glossary, list of characters, and pronunciation guide.
Thank you!
DeleteYou're right. Passive voice can be more effective or it works for a scene. That's why I stick to passive voice when I need to.
I know just what you mean. I struggle big time with silencing my inner writer/editor when I read.
Congratulations on your new Ebook, Chrys. Commas can be tricky things to master sometimes!
ReplyDeleteHappy New Year.
Thank you so much!
DeleteHappy New Year!!!
Cheers to your cool new free story! I grabbed my copy of Lightning Crimes. I'm eager to check it out.
ReplyDeleteI understand why comma splices is a rule, but I don't understand when people say NEVER use this, or NEVER use that, like with passive voice. It's like with adverbs; so many writers say to NEVER use them. But my personal rule, as with passive voice, is to use them sparingly but make them count when you do. Make it a strength, not a weakness.
Happy 2017!
Thank you so much! I hope you like it. :)
DeleteMake it a strength, not a weakness. I really like that.
Congrats on the short story release! I think the cover looks great.
ReplyDeleteI try to avoid passive voice, but there are times when I think it actually works better. And commas...try as I might, I never seem to actually get them where they actually need to be. :)
Thank you so much, M.J.!
DeleteCommas never like to be where they should. :P
Congrats to the winners! And yeah the passive writing voice rule is another rule I wished I've never heard. Yes, using words to make your story pop is ideal. But I just wished these rules didn't create this all or nothing tension with words. Why does it have to explicitly one or the other? Why not find a semblance of balance in using active and passive voice?
ReplyDeleteSee? That's what I do. Just like with showing and telling. I don't do one or the other. I do both when needed. And it's the same with active and passive voice. :)
DeleteCongratulations on publishing your first E-book, Chrys!I read the rule about passive and active voice elsewhere as an example today as well! As a Belgian native, rules are indeed very different when it comes to punctuation in the Dutch and English language, it seems like. I struggle with that at times and don't want it to get in the way of inspiration and progress too much!
ReplyDeleteThank you, Liesbet!
DeleteRules should never get in the way of inspiration or progress. All a writer should be allowed to worry about is writing.
Heheh, yeah, my eye gets caught on passive voice and comma splices as well. I'll sometimes shout it out, but a lot of the time I'll let them fly as a reader. At least rules give you something to think about, even if you ignore them. :)
ReplyDeleteGrats on your release!
As a reader, I've learned to let a lot of things go that I pick up on. Passive voice and comma splices seem to be a writing style for most.
DeleteThanks!
Congrats to all the winners! Happy to see some familiar names on the list. It's a great title.
ReplyDeleteAnd I think you did a fantastic job with the cover, Chrys. Well done!
It's also great to see new names. We wanted to get more people from the FB group to participate and we did. :)
DeleteThank you so much!!!
Good point. Most of the names on the list I didn't recognize.
DeleteI didn't know a few of them either. It was a nice surprise. :)
DeleteCongrats on your new release and the cover is good! Wish I could learn to do covers. And that darn passive voice. I didn't even know about it when I started writing. LOL.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Gwen! I didn't either. I just wrote. lol
DeleteI just downloaded your story and can't wait to check it out. Yeah, passive voice isn't as exciting as active voice, but sometimes a change of pace is nice. If I look through any of the books I enjoy reading, I always find passive voice. Readers don't mind it nearly as much as editors do.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much, Ken!
DeleteA change of pace is often needed. Your last sentence is so on point. Readers don't notice passive voice. Or comma splices, Or telling. Editors and other writers do.
Oh I love teaser stories! Gosh, the pretty girl on the cover looks a lot like you ;-)
ReplyDeleteI really don't mind rules when they serve as guidelines. I feel like more than a few are added to perhaps stifle a style or writer's voice though. It gives my muse the pouty face ;-)
Happy New Year, lady Chrys!
I thought the same thing...that the model looked like me. So strange. It's not me, I can assure you of that. :)
DeleteRules should never stifle a writer's style. Some writers' styles involve passive voice and comma splices, and there's nothing wrong with that.
Congrats on your ebook! I try not to think too much about writing rules and focus on what works for the story.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much, Sarah! Congrats to you again on making it in the anthology. :)
DeleteCongrats on your new release. Of the rules you mention: I never used the second one, so it doesn't bother me. But the passive voice - yeah. I try not to use it in my writing if I can help it. Sometimes, it is unavoidable, but much more often, the active voice replacing it makes the narrative better, punchier. I think it is a valid rule and I'm very strict about it when I edit others' works.
ReplyDeleteIt is a valid rule, but I don't think it's wrong. That's just me. :)
DeleteThank you, Olga!
Congrats again on your new release, Chrys! I struggle with passive voice as well. Happy New Year!
ReplyDeleteBest,
Adrienne
Thank you so much, Adrienne!
DeleteHappy New Year!
The cover looks nice and congrats on getting it published. Ya dun did it! ;)
ReplyDeleteThank you! I was sweating bullets during the whole self-published process, though. Wow. lol
DeleteShow Don't Tell has always bugged me. So much is lost when only active voice is used. It's a lot for a young writer to digest. Thanks for the free ebook, Chrys. It doesn't work outside of the States.
ReplyDeleteI hadn't realized it didn't work outside the states for Amazon. That's odd. I contacted Amazon to find out how I can get it free for other countries. Thanks for letting me know!
DeleteCongrats, Chrys! I love the cover of this self pub e-book. Nice work!! the one rule that drives me cray is the single space after a period. I was raised to use two spaces after and it's so ingrained. I've had to go back and take away spaces. It annoys me because it seems silly but then it looks wrong when there's a big gap between sentences.
ReplyDeleteThank you!!! My mom used to do two spaces after periods, too. It's what many people were told was proper formatting.
DeleteGreat Cover design work. You offering that option too?
ReplyDeleteI hope my writing has gotten better. Although, I'll be honest, I'm still learning as I go! :)
I'm still learning, too. There's nothing wrong with that. We should keep learning.
DeleteThanks! It's nice to know you like it enough to ask if I'm doing that service. Unfortunately, I can only manage simple covers with one large image and an image layered over it. Christine Rains has the skill to really take imaged and knit them together. :)
Sometimes passive voice is necessary. But used in excess...
ReplyDeleteCongrats on the new book.
Thanks, Liz.
DeleteYour author pic is real pretty Chrys. That cover is lovely. Trust me I've seen $200 premade covers that didn't look as good as this does. Great job. If you ever decide to go into selling premades I know some cool facebook spots to refer you to so you can meet fellow sellers and writers looking for covers. Rules are best when used with a side of caution. Congrats on your new book which I one clicked and your writing growth Chrys.
ReplyDeleteQueendSheena
2017 IWSG January Co-Host
Thank you so much! I'm happy to here you like the cover. I'm no where near a pro with covers. I can only do simple covers, but I never thought of selling premades. Hmm. That's a good idea.
DeleteCongrats on the book!! I actually like reading passive voice, so hey, other readers probably do as well. I say there's nothing wrong with throwing a few in if the scene calls for it. Congrats to the winners as well :)
ReplyDeleteJess
www.jessicatherrien.com
Thanks! I agree. I like reading passive voice and don't even realize it's passive.
DeleteCongrats on the book! It sounds pretty exciting, too!
ReplyDeleteThanks!
DeleteHave you noticed, what is correct also varies from editor to editor?
ReplyDeleteHuge congrats on your new release. I LOVE your cover.
Hugs
I have noticed that.
DeleteThanks!
PS Your profile photo is gorgeous.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much! :)
DeleteYour site is looking good. Congrats on the new e-book. Happy New Year.
ReplyDeleteJuneta @ Writer's Gambit
Thank you so much! Happy New Year!!!
DeleteRules, rules, rules. They change not only with editors, but with the times. The style of writing 100 years ago is quite different from what it is now. Some of the newer ways of writing are okay, but I think things could/can/do get so simplistic and sterile that books all begin to "sound" the same.
ReplyDeleteIf only we could keep the most basic grammar rules and forget everything else.
DeleteHi, Chrys,
ReplyDeleteHappy New Year!
I agree, I don't think passive voice is SUCH A CRIME.... Telling has it's merits and almost all Children's fiction from days gone by has been TOLD.... all our beloved fairy tales, etc.
How AWESOME!!!! CONGRATS to all the winners in this years' anthology! Can't wait to read their stories.
Happy New Year, Michael!!!
DeleteThat's a great point about children's fiction and fairy tales.
Thanks for popping by to visit at my blog and for the encouragement. I'm with you on "never ever" rules like that one about passive voice. You need to do what the piece demands. And while it's good to think about overuse of things like passive voice or certain gestures or any number of things, "never ever" is "never ever" right :-)
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You're welcome!
Delete"Never ever" is "never ever." We should let our story dictate how it should be written, not rules.
Happy New Year to You! I am reading your book, enjoying it...
ReplyDeleteCongratulations to the winners and thank you for posting next month's question, I can start thinking about it:)
Happy New Year!
DeleteThat is wonderful! Thank you for letting me know. :) And you're welcome for next month's question.
Congrats on the e-book! I love the cover!!
ReplyDeleteThank you! :)
DeleteThanks for the free story! I'm not too great with following writing rules. That's probably the reason I didn't include this month's question in my post :) With comma splices, I usually replace the comma with a semi-colon; I often overuse it.
ReplyDeleteYou're welcome! I love semicolons. :) At least fixing comma splices are generally easy. Even adding a couple words tends to fix it.
DeleteI have my copy of your story now. :) Congrats to the IWSG winners! I have cut down on my passive voice too. I'm still working on the commas!
ReplyDeleteYay! Thank you! Commas seem to always be a work-in-progress. ;)
DeleteI like the new look to your blog. Cool. Congratulations to the winners. The anthology should be a good one.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Beverly! I had fun tweaking my blog over the holidays. :)
DeleteI had someone in one of my critique groups that would mark every. single. example. of passive voice. There could be one sentence they felt was passive in an entire story, and they would feel the need to mark it. You know, sometimes it's going to happen. Yeesh.
ReplyDeleteYikes! That would've driven me bonkers.
Deletelooking forward to your blog hop =)
ReplyDeletecongrats to the winners!
and thanks for supporting my cradle rock release tour!
happy 2017!
Thank you, Tara!
DeleteAnd you're welcome. :)
Happy 2017!!!