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A Little Murder
By
Chrys Fey
Charm climbed out the shattered
window. Shards of glass stuck up out of the dirt like weeds. She carefully set
her feet on the ground then took off running. Behind her, she could hear her
stepfather’s screams. The rickety door to their falling down house flew open,
banged against the wall, and clattered back against the doorframe. He was
coming after her with a gun in his hand, the same gun he used to kill her
mother with moments before. He hadn’t known she was there, standing in the
hallway as they fought.
Her stepfather was mad-drunk at
three in the afternoon. When that happened, her mother usually got bruises
blooming purples and yellows on her body. This fight started when her mother
bravely announced she was leaving him. Her bravery got her killed. Now Charm
had to fend for herself.
Her small feet carried her though
the woods as she cried for her mother. Sticks stabbed her heels and
pine cones pricked her toes, drawing blood. She threw her petite body into palm bushes,
their teeth ripped at her arms and legs, but her fright was so strong it hid
the pain. She followed a skinny path covered with pine needles through the
Florida wilderness.
“Get back here, you little bitch,”
her stepfather hollered. The sound of his large, beer-padded body sounded like
a giant T-Rex. His shouts and curses followed Charm deeper and deeper.
She came out of the woods into a
clearing for the Anderson home. Charm knew they were gone for the summer. She
snatched the rusted key out from under the welcome mat and locked herself
inside. She didn’t even allow herself to take a breath. She ran into the
kitchen to find a weapon. If her stepfather was as dumb as a tapeworm, he would
stumble on by the Anderson home, but she didn’t take much stock in that
luxurious thought.
The Anderson kitchen had ancient
linoleum on the floor, sickly-yellow counters, and a scratched table that still
had pieces of the Andersons’ last meal there. It was a definite step up from
her home.
She tugged open a kitchen drawer. Cockroaches
scattered. She grabbed the biggest knife and hurried into the bedroom where she
slid under the bed to join a horde of dust bunnies. Hitchhikers clung to her
dress and poked her skin. She clutched the butcher knife to her chest.
Size eleven boots staggered up the
front steps of the Anderson home. The sound of the door breaking open made her
jump. “I know you’re in here! I’m going to kill you like I killed your mother.”
Chills danced along Charm’s spine.
Her stepfather’s footsteps moved through the cabin to her hiding place. She
couldn’t see him, but she knew he was in the room with her. She held her
breath. Large hands roped around her ankles. She let out a scream as he yanked
her out from under the bed. He pulled her between his legs and fumbled with the
gun. She didn’t think twice when she plunged the knife into his chest. When he
fell to the ground, she was cemented to the floor, panting for breath fear kept
stealing from her lungs.
When her stepfather didn’t move, she
realized he was dead. She stood over him as relief flooded her
three-foot-tall body. Surely, no one would convict a six-year-old
of murder. ©
THE END
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Thanks!
I thought that was a fine read, well done!
ReplyDeleteThank you!
DeleteWhat great tension! And yup, no one would convict a six year old!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Christine. And I didn't think so. :)
DeleteWhen I was reading it, I was wondering how old Charm was. So young to have experienced so much violence. Well written!
ReplyDeletebetty
Thanks, Betty! I didn't even know her age until that last sentence. Before then I thought he was maybe sixteen.
DeleteExcellent post, well done.
ReplyDeleteYvonne.
Thanks!
DeleteOh, I love that last line! Great story!
ReplyDeleteThank you! The last line makes the whole story. :)
DeleteSplendid story, Chrys! Gripping from the onset clear to the end when I sighed with satisfaction! :-)
ReplyDeleteThank you! I was hoping for that reaction. :)
DeleteExcellent short. Well done, and oh so young for such horror. But also a slice of real life. Good job. Can't wait to see what you do for Murderous Imaginings!
ReplyDeleteYeah. Unfortunately, some six-year-olds really do experience this type of horror.
DeleteAwesome flash fiction.
ReplyDeleteWhat a brave little girl.
Well done. :)
She is brave.
DeleteThanks! :)
I love it. Total surprise at the age of the girl and no, I don't think they will convict her. LOL Keep it coming, Chrys.
ReplyDeletesherry @ fundinmental
Thanks, Sherry! I will try to share more flash fiction. :)
Deletehaha I think she is safe from prosecution, as long as she doesn't become a serial killer.
ReplyDeleteThere's always that. lol
DeleteGreat story with very realistic emotions. And it wasn't murder.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Roland!
DeleteLoved the T-Rex reference. :) And a great twist at the end.
ReplyDeleteThank you! I was hoping someone would mention the T-Rex reference. :D
DeleteGreat reveal of her age at the end, Chrys! You totally had me thinking she was much older.
ReplyDeleteAwesome! :D
DeleteLoved that ending!
ReplyDeleteThanks!
DeleteThat was really intense. He got what he deserved.
ReplyDeleteI totally agree.
DeleteWhew! I was worried she wouldn't escape.
ReplyDeleteWell written, Chrys!
Thank you, Cherdo! :)
DeleteBravo, Chrys! That was powerful. Wow.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Lux! :)
DeletePoor kid - and no, I don't think she'd be convicted.
ReplyDeleteI didn't think so, but it was the perfect way to reveal her age. ;)
DeleteWow! What a thing for a six-year-old to go through!
ReplyDeleteI know. Even though I wrote it...it is awful.
DeleteYikes. Great flash. Great giveaway.
ReplyDeleteHave you heard from Gina lately?
Thanks!
DeleteNo, I haven't heard from Gina lately. I emailed her before 4th of July and haven't received a reply back. I know that she went on a vacation recently. I'm not sure if she's back yet, but I think she might be. I know I saw a post saying she had good news, so I'm waiting for an update on that.
What a gripping piece of flash fiction. I envy writers who can write FF. I can't do it. It takes real talent to pull readers into such a short story . So much suspense with brevity , I admire you . I loved this piece . You hooked me with the opening and kept my attention , curiosity and apprehension all the way through the very last line. I loved the last line, BTW. I, too, was wondering how old Charm was. You ended a suspenseful piece with an excellent knock out punch. Loved it.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much, Melissa! When I first started writing, I never thought I could write flash fiction or short stories but now it's all I seem to write. Thanks for the wonderful compliments! :D
DeleteIntense and exciting and disturbing (children shouldn't have to witness such things even though they do, too often).
ReplyDeleteI agree. They shouldn't.
DeleteOK that was riveting! I was thinking she was 11 or 12. This is frightening and this little girl has a rough start to life. I feel bad for her character because it sounds like real life.
ReplyDeleteThank you! At first I thought she was 16 but for some reason she wanted to be younger. I feel terrible for her too.
DeleteI really enjoyed reading your short story fiction. It is a creative writing ireland
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