This is going to be a short post serving as a reminder to eliminate redundancies. Why should you want to eliminate redundancies in your writing? Well because they are redundant!
Here is a short list I always make sure to cut from my
writing:
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He/she thought to him/herself.
If a character is thinking something
within the privacy of their mind then no one else can hear it. A thought is a sole
experience that only becomes public when spoken aloud, so when a character
thinks something you don’t have to add “to him/herself” because that is
already made clear.
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Stand/stood (up)
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Sit/sat (down)
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Turned (back, around)
When you make these actions of standing,
sitting or turning, it is obvious which direction you are moving and what you
are doing. Including "up", "down", "back", "around" is not necessary.
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Low/soft whisper
A whisper is already low/soft. You don’t
have to add an adjective to make it clear that someone is whispering. “He/she
whispered” makes it clear enough.
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No “exclaimed”
with an exclamation mark.
If there is an exclamation mark, readers
already know what is being said by the character is being exclaimed or shouted.
Leave out “he/she exclaimed” and just end the sentence with an exclamation
mark.
There are more redundancies you should eliminate, but these
are the most common, as well as the most unnecessary.
SHARE: Help me add to this list of redundancies in the comments.
QUESTION: What redundancies in writing bug you as a
reader?
In line with exclaimed is saying asked when the sentence ends in a question mark.
ReplyDeleteExactly! I was thinking of adding that one, but I wanted to keep this post short, so thank you for mentioning it here, as the first comment. :)
DeleteI always have to stop myself with the "thought to himself" issue. I don't know why but I seem to always do that and then have to go back and delete. Finally starting to break myself of the habit LOL.
ReplyDeleteGood list!
I have the habit of writing "sat down" or "stood up". I use those words paired together in my speech all the time, so it's hard to strike it out of my writing.
DeleteGreat tips! I'll have to add them to my list of things to Ctrl+F in my manuscript :)
ReplyDeleteGreat! I hope it helps. :)
DeleteThanks for the reminder, Chrys.....
ReplyDeleteYou're welcome, Michael. :)
DeleteGuilty! She exclaimed as she stood up and turned back around to read the list again. What a great list, she whispered softly to herself. I use those redundancies all the time. I'll have to stop that, she thought. Seriously, thanks for the list, and I really am guilty. (grin)
ReplyDeleteNo worries, Ashantay, I have been guilty of all of these, too!
DeleteThanks for the reminder.
ReplyDeleteI know I'm guilty of using 'stood up'... and there are others as well (which I just can't seem to remember at the moment...)
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"Stood up" is the one I fall victim to the most.
DeleteI am so guilty! You should see some of my first drafts. Sheesh! Thank God for revisions, otherwise the grammar and redundancy police would haul me away. Another one is "nodded his/her head." I think we can just say they nodded?
ReplyDelete"Nodded his/her head" is a good one. And now I have to add that to my list to check during my revisions. lol
DeleteMy pet peeve is when an author says the same thing over and over. One of my favourite Stephen King books is "Bag of Bones," and he's in love with a sentence in that novel--"Last night I dreamt I went to Manderley again," from "Rebecca." He must repeat that phrase at least twenty times in his book, and I have no idea why. It certainly wasn't moving the story forward. Or when authors explain the colour of a heroine's eyes again and again, or their characters make the same gesture on every page. Stuff like drives me crazy!
ReplyDeleteThose things drive me crazy, too. Sometimes my characters can smile/smirk too much so I'm working on changing that, but I agree that repetition is a pet peeve of mine, too.
DeleteThere are sure some I may be guilty of using a time or two haha asked is one that seems kinda redundant, but then some people don't get the question mark is there and need it spelled out for them
ReplyDeleteI think most authors are guilty of doing these every now and then during the first draft. And if they say they don't, they are lying! HAHAHA
DeleteOh, Chrys there are so many extra words that I go back and edit out of my work. They're pretty useless. I like your examples though. Dialogue takes some practice to write and those are great pointers.
ReplyDeleteI have a long list of words I check my manuscripts for, too. These are just a handful from the list. And it keeps growing! lol
DeleteExcellent tips Chrys and certainly things I need to hear. The redundancy that comes to mind is overly using "he or she said." Obviously, the reader can figure out via the conversation that something is being said.
ReplyDeleteYou're right! I had the he/she said problem when I first started writing. A writer only has to mention who is talking in the beginning of a conversation. After that, it's easy to follow the dialogue back and forth between two characters.
Delete"Rose up" is one of the redundancies that comes to mind, because rising is only one direction. With the stand and sit, you can sit up and stand down, or back in most cases, so seeing "up" with stand or "down" with sit doesn't bother me.
ReplyDeleteThat's a good point! And you're right that you can sit up or stand down. In those cases, it would be important for a writer to specify that.
DeleteI attended a writers workshop once on overwriting, and these were some of the issues addressed. The minimalist in me rose up and consumed the concept. They also talked about dialog tags and how wasted they can be. All good stuff to keep in mind.
ReplyDeleteAbsolutely! I remind myself of both all the time. :)
DeleteOh wow I hadn't even thought of these when I've read them before. I read examples of these all the time and had never considered them redundancies. Lesson learned :-)
ReplyDeleteI'm glad to help. :)
DeleteI've found lots of redundancies to edit out, like the ones you mentioned. It's not that I was doing it on purpose or out of not knowing how to write; I just didn't realize they were redundancies at the time, since I was so used to hearing people talking like that, or seeing it in older books.
ReplyDeleteAnother sort of redundancy is overstating established information, either through dialogue or in a narrative passage. If the reader already is familiar with this information, why repeat it as though the characters and the reader are idiots who need reminding?
I know exactly what you mean. I had no idea they were redundancies either before I found out they were. I think every writer has to learn this. And the fact that we talk like this makes it hard not to do the same thing in our writing.
DeleteYou're absolutely right! Overstating information is another form of redundancy that should be cut out as well.
It goes along with the sit/stand thing, but I always type 'crouch down' in my drafts and then have to remove the 'down' during revisions. A bad habit I can't break. :-)
ReplyDeleteThat's a good on, Jocelyn! It is a hard habit to break.
Delete'Very unique' is one I can't stand. Something is 'unique.' It can't be 'very unique.' I'd learned this from The West Wing, when the president corrected an amateur speechwriter, and it's stuck with me since. I use redundancies like 'very,' 'just' and 'quite' when I leave blog comments, but I'm a lot more disciplined and crisp in my writing. (I hope!)
ReplyDeleteGood point! Now I wonder if I ever wrote "very unique". HAHA
DeleteIt's easy to include these these redundancies, but thank heaven for editing editing. I'm particularly partial to writing "just shortly before." My justs, just love to pop up all over the place, especially where they're not needed.
ReplyDeleteI have the same problem with "just"! It's amazing when I use the Microsoft Search tool and find just how many times I use "just". I;m cringing (just) thinking about it. :P
DeleteIt is a bit shattering to the writer ego. But if we catch those buggers, we can pat ourselves on our backs.
DeleteWe sure can! Or if we can't, our betas can. ;)
DeleteOne which comes to mind is "added bonus." We already know the word "bonus" means something extra so we don't need the word "added!"
ReplyDeleteI think we all make the mistake of using redundant phrases. But I guess this is one of the reasons why we must find great editors!
Fantastic post, Chrys. When I'm editing my novel next month, I will be sure to be on the prowl for redundancies now!
I never though of "added bonus" before, but you make a great point!
DeleteWe do. And it's nothing to be ashamed of. It's something we all have to eventually learn.
Awesome! :)
I can still hear my mother saying, "Sit up straight! You want posture like your cousin Natalie!" LOL. Great post. These are points we all need to heed.
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